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Emily and Will had loved each other for a while now, they went to the same high school and they have been sweethearts ever since. Emily was a girl who had friends but not a lot and was a tennis player for their high schools team and got spectacular grades.Will, on the other hand knew he wanted to be a marine and had known it since he was a young child. Williams father was a marine and so was will, destined for the life of service.

Emily was an unfaltering source of light in Williams life they practically survived just due to each others presence and just being close. When they were apart they just weren't the same. So it was no shock to anyone in their school when Emily got accepted into the big time ivy league college she wanted and will followed her wherever she went still training to get into the corps.

It also was predictable when they were engaged on Christmas due to both of their catholic families. Williams being a large mexican family with several of their extended family joining emily's family for the holiday, emily's family was a traditional conservative southern family, and they were proud of their stunning platinum blonde hair blue eyed princess who was engaged to the most compatible man for her. The families got together and raised enough money to get the couple the marriage of their dreams in mid summer of the next year just before William goes off to war.

William and Emily decide that even before the wedding, though they were both virgins and they were able to, that after their marraige they werent going to have sex untill he returned home so they could have time for him to be there at the birth of his child.

So they had the fairytale wedding of every woman's dream, plenty of overdone sparkle and glitz with a big enough bill for it to make bill gates wince. But neither parents cared about the price and enjoyed them seeing their children love each other the way spouses should.

But something strange happened that night, on their way home from the wedding Emily was in a friskier mood than anticipated grabbing at his leg and such, to which william tried to refrain, but as they headed into the driveway slowly rounding the corner something flashed in the sky, as if a photograph was taken by god, but really bright. They both remarked how weird it was,  then proceeded to park their car, and walk up the front walk and go into their small ranch style home.  

It was modest but modern, it was obvious that Emily decorated it with little nick nacks and such everywhere. And as they got into the door off directly to the right of the door was a modern and trendy kitchen. The kitchen was small but wrapped itself around the wall where the front door was and the adjoining wall was, the appliances were stainless steel and with the over polished high end look to them. The cabinets were like straight out of a magazine they were the intensly dark cherry stain, with the stainless steel modern door handles to match.  Then there was the countertops, this is where it is apparent there was no money unused on these, these counter tops were the ice cold peices of black high end granite.There was a large counter on the open side of the squared off kitchen, making it feel more closed in, and personal. The counter had the sleek granite to it.

And as the couple entered their house Emily immediately got up on the counter and propped herself on the counter and William standing next to her began to make out with her, and as their tongues frisked by each other, william picked up his beautiful blonde bride, and carried her still kissing to their bedroom.

The bedroom had a modern feel to it, very sleek and organized look. The bed was a king size bed with red silk linens on it with white sheets Under neath, and yet again emily's feminine design skills came in with the near dozen accent pillows laying on the bed .

William sat her down and with one valiant push got all the throw pillows off in one shot. William looked out the window just before laying down with his bride and pondered at the night sky as he saw many more stars than usual, he always remembered the sky because when Emily got lonely while he was at bootcamp he would tell her not to be afraid, and to look up at the sky every night, because no matter what he is under that same sky and hes looking up at it too. Then he smiled and paused for a moment as he looked at his bride, she was every mans dream, she had long blonde hair blue eyes she had large, triple d breasts, a tiny waist and large wide hips perfect for having children with the biggest southern booty you could find. And she was all that and she was all his now.

He got into bed and Layed on top of her, and they made out, and for a while that was enough, but William wanted more he was hard, harder than ever. William wasn't a masturbater and there was a lot of built up pent up cum inside of William from his youthful younger years. However something startled the both of them, the front door jingled and creaked open.

William hopped up at attention, the marine man inside him grabbed the gun under his bed as Emily cowered behind him as they went to the other room, they saw the white light, the one so familiar that they had seen before while pulling into the driveway.

The light went off, then there were two blobs of this blooish goo, and they rolled towards Emily and will. Emily screamed, and squirmed away, william shot at the blobs several times with the glock in hand until he unloaded a whole clip of bullets into the blobs then proceeded to run out to the back door and there was more, they had taken emily. William screamed for Emily trying to fight all measures to save her but they got a hold of William too.

Soon they found themselves strapped to two hard metal examining tables. Their arms and legs strapped tightly and legs spread far apart. William asked Emily if she was okay  she looks over and smiles. Replies "yeah" she's seemingly calm and so is he.

Then a door opens and one of the goo creatures or water men come in and go over to Emily, William yells and screams at them not to do anything to her, but the human size black one enters the room. It has the appearance of hard plastic and came over to will and prodded his body and then both water blobs tightened Williams restraints, William begged them not to kill him, and Emily was crying out and pleading she didn't think she could go on without him.

Then the black plastic alien goes in between Williams legs and he screams no, and the alien then takes out a long thin tube, no bigger than a centimeter in diameter. And the black alien slides it in the opening of Williams penis and slid it all the way in untill wills bladder and as will screams and cries out in pain there is a pumping sound and William feels hot juices pump into him and fill up his bladder and then there is a larger ball that tears through his penis as it is pumped up. Once it sits in his bladder there it will make it's home.... For the next couple of days at least....

-- Edited by Iwantmymanpregnant on Friday 18th of November 2011 02:55:42 PM

-- Edited by Iwantmymanpregnant on Friday 18th of November 2011 02:56:59 PM



-- Edited by theKicking on Friday 18th of November 2011 07:21:16 PM

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Please give me feedback and any ideas or things to be included, this is adult matter, so please only 18+ reading this! Happy mpreg-ing and much love to this community!

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I can give you feedback without even reading it:

You need some paragraph formatting. The giant wall of text is not your friend.

You also need to watch your punctuation use and capitalization.



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sounding great so far, some grammar issues, but w/e you got something here.

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Also this is my first story posting to here, it's kind of nerve wrecking I certainly hope people like it!

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In the top right hand corner, there should be a button that allows you to go back and edit posts that you've previously done. And please don't double post unless you are posting up chapters of your story.

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I tried to create paragraphs but, it's just not recognizing the spacing? It's not adding in the space between the lines, am I doing something wrong?

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Would you like me to try for you? BrimmingBelly was also having trouble with his paragraphs as well. It might be the browser you are using.



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Would you? I mean im at the moment using Safari on a iPhone. But I tried it on google chrome, on my laptop. I mean if you wouldn't mind like trying to figure it out. I would love to make it look better and put some suggestions I got to use.

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Okay, I broke it up a little bit for you. Your grammar needs a little bit of improvement (it was a little bit hard to follow) but at least it's not all in one big chunk anymore. Keep working on it, and maybe ask someone to be a beta for you. In English your first language?

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I think this has some good potential so I am sure we'll all help you keep working at it ^_^

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I speak four languages fluently, English Spanish polish and Slovak so yeah, it's a lil roughy to be gramatically correct in any of them. I can have full blown conversations but remembering what sentence stucture is which is hard lol.

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